Hey
All,
So if
you have made it here then you are probably in my English class... thus
enduring the blog project. However, I absolutely love blogs. I have a personal
blog of my own and hopefully this blog will help me tremendously
improve my writing on my personal blog. A little bit about myself is I am
interested in forensics science and becoming a forensic analyst, however I am
also very interested in interior design. You should remember that for the
future in case you need me to decorate your house. Interior design is my
passion but it doesn't promise a solid income, so I'm studying
forensics because I enjoy solving puzzles. Some of my hobbies include
traveling I've been to 19 states. I also love the beach and surfing that
is my getaway from all the crazy in life. The beach is just so relaxing
and if you have never been to the ocean its beautiful the vast deep blue
with magnificent creatures that live in it. To some the ocean is scary but it
is so intriguing the animals that can devour you in seconds and those that
are so friendly, because of this I have so much respect for the ocean. I
also enjoy blogging as I said before. I started blogging when I got a new
job and didn't know anybody so I started a blog and wrote in it
almost every day then shared it with who I had become friends with. Blogs are
super relaxing for me and I started a portion of my blog about "Good
Phoenix Eats" about all of the incredible food places I've eaten
at in Phoenix. These places consisted of hole in the wall eats to fine dining
eats and all of those in between. That’s a little about myself
Sammi
Hey Sammi! I love the ocean too but I never have much time anymore for such things. When I was younger is was the beaches at Malibu and Zuma during the sunny weekends. I only ever got to boogey board though. I took some surfing lessons with my daughter during out last vacation to Hawaii. Her and I have talked about doing something like that again but time will tell. In terms of constructive feedback, I appreciate how your writing seems to be stream of consciousness. Please take this with the good-hearted nature it is meant with...as someone who studied a lot of classic literature, sometimes I feel like there is no time to breath when reading what you write. I expect that you are trying to define a style that you like and with which you comfortable. It's probably just me, but I "read/say" in my head and I look for punctuation to actually breath. I end up with this visual image of you speaking that consistently without taking a breath, and I am right there with you waiting for an opportunity to breath. Also, paragraphs help to break up different thoughts and subject matter. This may be something to consider with the font since there is no height difference in the letters to provide visual cues/breaks to the text. Can't wait to read what you have to share next!
ReplyDeleteOMG...OK, I have to reply one more time now that I see how this is formatting. Now it looks like I did the same thing as you. How tricky is that? I wonder, do you get the same impressions I did when you read the reply :D
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